tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6649591714373684167.post3803837778638781815..comments2024-02-29T16:43:55.241-05:00Comments on Lurking Rhythmically: Curse/Or: Chapter 5 cont'dErin Palettehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09984632637166408245noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6649591714373684167.post-68338216599562095292011-07-31T02:28:42.688-04:002011-07-31T02:28:42.688-04:00I was wondering when the shadowy other side was go...I was wondering when the shadowy other side was going to come into play, with this much power bouncing about there was no way Netty's collective was going to remain unopposed.<br />Really excited to see the next phase setting up to kick into action :-)Ricochethttp://pinballmind.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6649591714373684167.post-39445146130039067942011-07-25T00:48:13.188-04:002011-07-25T00:48:13.188-04:00 Broken ceramic from spark plugs is fantastic for ... Broken ceramic from spark plugs is fantastic for shattering glass, as it has a higher specific density than brick or rocks.Erin Palettehttp://lurkingrhythmically.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6649591714373684167.post-67622668302721535952011-07-23T04:58:05.868-04:002011-07-23T04:58:05.868-04:00I'm betting that that spark plug wouldn't ...I'm betting that that spark plug wouldn't exactly stay broken, would it?C'nor (Outermost Toe)noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6649591714373684167.post-73952242436536219262011-07-20T03:02:38.334-04:002011-07-20T03:02:38.334-04:00I feel that the 'she groused' is a little ...I feel that the 'she groused' is a little redundant; 'groused' is a good word but it's fairly obvious who's speaking and in what tone they're doing so. You could possibly lose 'she screamed' as well. You craft your dialogue and situations well and they do the work that's needed without the need for egregious alternative verbs. When you're economical, you turn out such lyrical miracles as "the rich, sweet smoke that would rescue them both" - and that's brilliant.Vonhttp://kaptainvon.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com