I completely fucked the dramatic tension in the last installment. Camel recovers from her gunshot way too quickly.
Sure, it seems all right to you guys, because you read it in a serialized fashion and therefore time passed between installments. But when I read the entire chapter in one sitting, she just gets up too damn fast. In movie terms, she'd be down for like, 30 seconds tops.
I need to stretch the dramatic narrative out thusly:
- Camel is shot. Readers go, "Oh shit. Did the protagonist just get shot dead in chapter 3?"
- Focus then shifts to something else for what would be 5 minutes of screen time -- enough to make you forget about Camel and worry about something else.
- Then, and ONLY then, do I have her do her "cancer resurrection" schtick.
Okay, now that I've actually admitted to this, I have no choice but to sit in this bookstore and fix the damn scene.